The little boy scampered through the puddles left by the rain that came on him suddenly. The tin roof of his shack by the dirt track had holes that let in the rain water. The coarse orange blanket he shared with his brother was soaking wet. He would get curses and kicks when Buddy got home from working the shift. He pulled the blanket out to spread and dry in the sun, dragging it and making it muddy.
The sky looked grey and the little boy sat outside on the edge of a large jagged stone, half buried in the dirt track. Momma had once cut her face on that, when Pa had pushed her out in a drunken rage. She was gone before long and the boys took to looking for food in the bins.
The sun was out now and it got warm. The little boy scraped the mud stains out of the blanket and flicked away the water droplets.
Word Count : 162. This is my submission for Priceless Joy’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge, where we are given a photo prompt and approximately 100-175 words with which to build our stories. The challenge is open to everyone who would like to participate.
Cross posted for Day 4 task of Writing 101.
You must have observed poverty, hardship and suffering very closely to write a piece like this 🙂
I am always amazed at the ability of writers to embed so much in so few words 🙂
Superb!
I have shared it on Twitter, FB and Google.
I hope many people will enjoy this flash.
Love and light ❤
Anand 🙂
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I am trying to pack in a lot in as few words as possible. Thank you so much for sharing!
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You are doing an amazing job and it is my pleasure to share 🙂
Anand
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Wonderful story Sona! It makes us realize there are a lot of people (and children) that live in poverty and have less than satisfactory living conditions. This little boy lives in fear of his Pa. Great story and thank you for participating in the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge!
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Thanks, Priceless Joy! I loved writing this because the picture provided was so beautiful and could be interpreted in a lot of ways 🙂
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Thank you so much! I have had several people tell me that about the photo prompt and that makes me happy!
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Vivid. Very impressive.Loved reading it.
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Thank you so much! You always have kind words for me 🙂
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I love how you imprinted the different colors into significant portions of the story. Reading it felt like I was listening to the boy’s voice. Style wise, this is one of my favorites from you. ☺
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Thanks Ameena, for your kind words 🙂
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Wow lovely thoughts.. A nicely mixed story with rain dropz and the colour orange 👌
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Thank you! You should also try flash fiction. It really is fun 🙂
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So sad yet lovely.
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Thank you so much for stopping by and reading 🙂
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This is a lovely little story book of character and emotion, you really got a lot out of that photo! I hope Buddy is in a good mood when he gets home.
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Thank you so much for visiting and reading 🙂
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Rain – and Shimla – lovely! Awesome!
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Thank you!
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Heart wrenching tale. It evoked a lot of emotions.
#MyFriendAlexa #literarylehareads
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Thanks for reading, Leha. This story is my favourite.
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Finally, I read your favorite story. Glad I stumbled on it. Written beautifully. DO write fiction, you have a way with words, Sona. 🙂
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Aww…thanks Priya. You are always a great encourager!
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Wonderful lines. Being in poverty is bad, more so during kids. Should we blame the parents for their state? God only knows.
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Thanks for reading this flash fiction, Mahesh.
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