Clickety clack went the sound in all hours of the night. Granny’s house was near the rail tracks and the trains could be heard whooshing by, the tracks rattling, the screech of the wheels and the shrill whistle. The branches of the nearby trees rustled in the wind, disturbed by the passing train.

The children always hated the noise and put their fingers in their ears to block out the sound. Granny smiled because she had lived half her life there. The trains did not let her feel lonely, she said.

And now she gathered the children’s clothes and tied them in a dirty sheet to make a bundle that their father could carry. He was coming later that day to take his little ones across the tracks to the settlement where he had a small farm.

“Please come with us, Granny,” they tugged at her skirts. “I have someone to take care of,” she said placidly, as she plucked button daisies and held them in her sweating fists, hobbling slowly towards her husband’s grave.

Word Count : 175

Thank you to Louise Bunting with The Storyteller’s Abode for the prompt photo this week.

This is my submission for Priceless Joy’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge, where we are given a photo prompt and approximately 100-175 words with which to build our stories. The challenge is open to everyone who would like to participate.

21 thoughts on “Clickety Clack

  1. A lovely, endearing story. I love the way you depict Granny as so calm and understanding – and so attached to her home with the noisy trains passing by so often. Her devotion to her departed husband is heartwarming, despite the sadness of loss involved. She evidently shared so much of her life with him in this house, so she isn’t likely to leave it now. πŸ™‚

    I hope you don’t mind me pointing out that, at the end of speech, before the tag (he said, she said etc.) the speech mark should come after the comma, question mark or exclamation mark This is how one of your sentences should be punctuated:
    “I have someone to take care of,” she said, placidly…

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    1. Thank you so very much! I am so happy that you liked the story and I am thrilled that you pointed out that the speech mark should be after the comma. This is one of the things I am confused about and have always been wanting to look it up. You made it so clear πŸ™‚

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  2. Living by the railroad tracks and hearing the sound of trains coming by for many years, one would get use to the sound and probably learn to love it and be soothed by it. Granny is soothed by the train and the fact that her beloved husband is buried near by. Wonderful story that touches our heart reading it! Thank you for participating in the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge!

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