The following work of Flash Fiction is in collaboration with my fellow blogger friend, Jithin of Photrablogger. The picture above is his creative photography which inspired this series of flash fiction writing. Do check out his blog to read about his adventures while travelling and many lovely pictures.
Character List:
Margaret or Maggy- a 19 year old girl, out to search some truths
Steve- the caretaker of the mansion, a man in his fifties
Robert- the house cook
Grandpa- Maggy’s grandfather
Part 1 by Sweety
Part 2 by Traveling Hat
Part 3 by Saya
Part 4 by Moses
You are now reading Part 5 of the story. Please read the parts that came before so that you can enjoy the story and understand the flow.
Maggy sat up in her bed abruptly, shaken from the vivid dream she just had and saw Robert, sitting in a chair opposite, looking at her speculatively. Dawn was breaking outside. She saw the trees of the woods take form in the growing light. The cold light of the day did nothing to dispel her fears or to allay her apprehensions. She pressed her fingers to her temples. She felt overwhelmed by the turn of events.
She had arrived in her Grandpa’s mansion the previous night in the hope of uncovering his mysterious disappearance a year back. But, the bloodcurdling scream in the middle of the night and the encounter with a shadowy form had left her nerves frayed.
Maggy swung her legs out of the bed but moaned as she tried to stand. Robert jumped up to help her. Maggy felt a vague discomfort as he steered her with his hand at her elbow. The touch of his soft shirt sleeve evoked memories of a childhood when she and Rob played in the kitchen, in the house and in the woods near the enormous mansion. The look in his eyes as he appraised her were cool but she could not forget the warmth of his gaze just the night before.
Maggy freshened up in the bathroom hurriedly and changed her clothes. “I would like to go for a walk”, she announced weakly. Robert excused himself, saying he needed to be in the kitchen to plan the day’s meals. With trepidation, Maggy walked out of the side door of the living room to the large and now unkept garden. The fringes of the once magnificent garden were slowly being encroached by the surrounding woods. Her grandfather had regaled her with fascinating stories of the woods when she was little. With a start, she remembered her dream, where she was in the dungeon of the mansion. “Is there really a dungeon here? “, she wondered aloud. Her sound sounded hollow even to herself.
Maggy walked on. In her misery, she hardly looked at the tiny wild flowers growing in the bushes. The birds chirped, but her ears echoed with the sound of her Grandpa’s voice, calling for help. She felt as if she were walking in a dream. As the bushes grew denser and the trees blocked out light, Maggy realised she had walked farther than she had realized. She turned to go back. Trying to distangle her clothes from the thorns of a plant, she noticed strange marking on one of the tree trunks.
Surprised, she came to herself with an alertness she had not felt before. She reminded herself of the reason of her visit to the mansion. She had to find out what had happened to her beloved Grandpa. Brushing the leaves off her clothes, she looked around keenly. There was another tree trunk with a similar mark on it. And another… if it was a trail, it seemed to be leading deeper into the woods. She would lose her way, Maggy realised. “I must come back with someone, maybe Rob”.
Her heart quickened at the thought of Rob. With brisk steps, she walked back to the edge of the garden. Some of the beautiful wild flowers were trampled! Was she careless while entering the woods? Or had someone else been here, after her? Following her?
Maggy quickly entered the house through the small kitchen door. Robert was drying the dishes with a towel. Last night’s mess had all been cleared away. The door of the cabinet they had hidden in last night was ajar. Following Maggy’s gaze. Robert walked over to close the door. All of a sudden, Maggy heard a deep, rumbling sound coming from the cabinet? Or was it from beneath the wooden floor of the kitchen? No, she was not mistaken because the vibrations traveled through her body.
Shocked, Maggy looked at Rob but his expression was masked. “Rob”, she blurted out, “Is there a dungeon underneath the mansion”?
“Dungeon? No!”, he said almost harshly. Maggy felt lightheaded. As she swayed on her feet Rob shot out a hand to help her and she saw the crushed petals of the wild flowers on his shirt sleeve…
Can Maggy trust Robert? Where does the trail in the woods lead to? Is there really a dungeon under the house?
To be continued by Manvi
some more mystery!! π This is wonderful! And the new two threads are great, the way leading to the woods and possibility of a villain in Rob!
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Since we are in the middle of the chain, i thought of introducing more possibilities to work on.
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yes, that is exactly what we need π
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Oh my, I Love this new twist. Is the good guy the bad guy now? Ooh, this story is just getting more and more exciting. I really enjoyed this part, mystery is one of my favorite genre. Great part. π
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Is the good guy the bad guy? Depends on how the story develops. Just introducing possibilities π
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Ameena, if mystery is what you love to read, I am sure this is what you would love to write. Why don’t you join the chain and give us a chance to enjoy your wonderful writing?
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Thank you very much for the offer. I actually considered it when Jithin started the chain, but time wouldn’t permit me this time. But you all are doing a great job π
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Maybe, in the next chain, then π
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great work Sona π the best part of this story are the surprises. We think the story will go in some direction ..but actually it takes a totally different turn π
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Thank you. Let us see what happens by the time it ends π
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Superb twists again….the trail in the woods is so exciting and so is the rumbling noise..hmm…I wonder what it is !! The possibility of a negative streak in Rob , makes it so much more exciting…Well done π
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Thanks! It is so much fun to pick up from where someone has stopped, using your imagination and then write so that others have a scope to develop your story.
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That is so true Sona…its fun using your creative imagination to give life to characters born in another person’s mind ! Even I am so excited to see the way my characters have taken shape and the fact that the story is evolving so beautifully ! Cheers to our team π
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This is beautiful! I love the way you flowed from my story perfectly! Your style is so superb! Glad to have you on this chain! π
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Thank you! I think you have a very imaginative way of story telling. I wanted to do justice to your part. I am so happy to be reading all the wonderful authors in this chain.
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Thank very much for a job well done! π I am moses from Nigeria..you are sona right? Where are you from?
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I am Sona from India. I am thrilled to have someone from Nigeria as a friend!
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Wow…yet another friend from india! Over the past week i think the closet friends i have made on WP are from india! Courtesy of jithin and his chain! π
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Yes, thanks to Jithin for bringing us together.
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I just lunched a writing competition in a Nigerian university and i would love you to be one of the international judges! All the work involved is to read the long listed stories (Five) and pick which one you think should win the compitition! More details is on my homepage π pls accept my offer.
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Just checked the competition details. This sounds like a great opportunity for the university students. I would absolutely love to read the final entries to get a taste of the writing in your part of the world. Count me in! Being a Judge sounds like a big thing. I can this do this informally as well!
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Great work. The thrilling mystery is definitely making me read all the parts read in one go. I am Rashmi of Soul n Spirit and have to write the last part I believe.
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Oh, Rashmi, i thoroughly enjoyed reading you in the last chain. You have a beautiful blog and your exuberance comes through in your words. Thank you for reading. I feel happy to be part of this great group.
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Thanks dear for the kind words. More smiles to you π
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You brewed such an exciting twist! I love every bit and byte of your post. You’ve penned it so beautifully.
-Abbie π
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Thanks so much, Abbie! I loved your part so much! Sorry for trying to kill off the romance that you had so beautifully brought in. I am rather bad at building an atmosphere like that. Looks like i need to be reading more of romance genre π
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Thank you so much Sona! HAHA! Don’t worry I was just trying to present possibilities for the next writers. Writing about romance is not really my forte. Stay warm and take care π
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I hope your 3 questions were answered π I really love what you have brought here and as always,you paint stories oh so vividly. I think we have clearly established that one by now. It’s truly wonderful to write this with you. I’m looking forward to more collaborations with you and more of your writings π
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Yes, James, all my questions have been answered and some more. The way you ended the story was simply wonderful! Thank you for using up all the clues that the various parts provided you with. It is good to have you as part of our team.
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This was beautiful Sona..You bought another thread into the story, and now the “hero” maybe a villain too π and twisting it, giving more space to others to write..!! π Exciting twist..!!
Off to read the next part, and I am enjoying this π
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Yes, it is great fun to be reading different voices and styles. Thank you for reading my story. I think you too should be a part of this chain.
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Yes, I may try it soon π I am not much into fiction..!!
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Try it even then. It helps when you are writing a small part in the chain. I too was very sceptical before starting. But, it worked out well in the end.
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Oh thank you so much for the support..!!
Yes Jithin did ask me, but I kept kicking the ball forward many a times..
But I will be doing it soon..!! π hopefully..!!
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Hope to see you in this flash fiction chain itself π
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Oh i think that would be really early π I am still trying to decipher fiction π
But your support was really kind, and I am really going to try it soon π
Thank you so much …!! It meant, a lot..!!
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Waiting π
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Even I am waiting to be honest..!!
I really wanna join the chain, as soon as I feel comfortable π
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Just jump in. Don’t think too much about it. In any case, you are not taking a crash course to learn writing fiction. So, what you will be tomorrow, you are today,
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Crash course in fiction ?? I have had enough of my technical education π
Ya, you are right…!! Too much of thinking spoils the fun, and makes us more conscious..!! hmm I too am gonna try writing something.. π
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Wow! I am ImPrEsSeD!! Excellent story telling, now I am REALLY afraid to write a section. Yikes!!
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Your appreciation made my day π
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Seriously, I was serious! Excellent!
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Thank you so much! To be truthful, i myself felt inadequate the very first time. And scared every single time, not just because i have to come up to expectations but also to be worthy of being part of such a talented group of writers.
Love to have you with us π
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Thank you so much! That is exactly how I feel.
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